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In a distance in front of a store,
on an old piece of cardboard.
A way of living she didn't ask for,
cold, so cold, no one walks toward.
...the poor...
Looking at your face,
her eyes, shredding your grace.
No silk and lace,
nor anything for a good base.
...the rich...
Watching her sit there,
your thoughts, judging her so unfair.
All your wealth and still nothing to share,
All your health and the less you care.
...the moment...
Views crossing each other,
two in tears, the other couldn't bother.
One isn't a martyr,
but the other isn't a savior either.
...the difference...
The cold realistic poverty,
or a fake golden journey.
Being accused for anarchy,
or a checkbook armory.
...the ugly reality.
on an old piece of cardboard.
A way of living she didn't ask for,
cold, so cold, no one walks toward.
...the poor...
Looking at your face,
her eyes, shredding your grace.
No silk and lace,
nor anything for a good base.
...the rich...
Watching her sit there,
your thoughts, judging her so unfair.
All your wealth and still nothing to share,
All your health and the less you care.
...the moment...
Views crossing each other,
two in tears, the other couldn't bother.
One isn't a martyr,
but the other isn't a savior either.
...the difference...
The cold realistic poverty,
or a fake golden journey.
Being accused for anarchy,
or a checkbook armory.
...the ugly reality.
Both women and still they are a world apart.
I really like this poem, it flows good and the message (more importantly) is very clear I believe.
Maybe you have a suggestion, don't hasitate, tell me. Input people, gimme input
This is the idea behind the poem: Poverty awareness
:thumb65179784: by Keiko-Minoshita
Image from google, Sons of Anarchy © screenshot, so their property not mine. And the picture, how I use it, is not how the story goes in the show. But this is the closest thing coming to rich and poor in one photo to my ideal preview picture.
I really like this poem, it flows good and the message (more importantly) is very clear I believe.
Maybe you have a suggestion, don't hasitate, tell me. Input people, gimme input
This is the idea behind the poem: Poverty awareness
:thumb65179784: by Keiko-Minoshita
Image from google, Sons of Anarchy © screenshot, so their property not mine. And the picture, how I use it, is not how the story goes in the show. But this is the closest thing coming to rich and poor in one photo to my ideal preview picture.
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Overall Vision Originality Technique ImpactThis Poem is very well written, lots of description and detail used gives this piece a lovely flow, keeping readers intent.
The detail that stuck with me the most, however. is the way you've headed the verses, like lots of small titles. Also the verses all have a good rhyme, now rhyme isn't everything, but it sure helps if you use it well, which you have.
I would like to see more along these lines, keep trying to push yourself to produce even better work. there is allot of potential for you to add to this piece.
Very well done from me.