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Personally I think this is my best piece ever. It makes me cry, it makes me think, it helps me get rid of some nasty (troubling) thoughts. But it sure makes me remember the fallen ones. Hope you like it.
I started writing this a while ago, when a cousin of my dad died, he was 38 years old, he had a cancer-type only 3 other people in the world had, so the doctors didn't know enough about it, he suffered alot of pain, but still seemed to be worried about his loved ones. The last day he stood fierce and prowd beside his invalid car, a woman stopped and asked him: "do you know where the young man lives, that is in need of sedation" he answered: "Yeah, that is me".
That was his moment of silence, his moment of peace, before the storm came and dead took him away the day after.
He lived his life as he wanted it, eventually he had peace with his condition, but not with the pain and suffering it had taken on his parents, especially his father, who has longcancer. His father lost his last brother, survived one of his sons, had surgery himself multiple times, his wife went to hospital several times and still they all stand proud and fierce as a family.
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